Place Describing
Place Describing
My Greatest
Christmas
Christmas is a
big festival celebrated by the people in the winter season. Everyone enjoy a
cultural holiday at this day. All the governmental (such as schools, colleges,
universities, educational institutions, training centers, offices, etc.) and
non-governmental organizations become closed at this day. People celebrate this
festival with great enthusiasm and lots of preparations and decorations. It is
celebrated every year on 25th of December. It is known as the Feast day of
Christ and celebrated in the honor of birth of Jesus Christ. It is the day of
great significance for the Christians.
Normally, the
house of westerner or some Thai people will decorate their house with the big
tree, called mistletoe. The mistletoe decorated by lots of little gifts.
In this day, the mistletoe standing
on the right corner of my house. The fire burning the charcoal in the chimney, it
make the atmosphere warmed by flame
of fire. The shelves located next to the chimney has lots of my toys that the Santa
gave me and my sister last year on it. I really love Christmas because it’s the
day that my family does the activities together.
Finally, the important element things that you have to miss to buy are the mistletoe,
gifts and chimney, it making a perfect Christmas. I hope you’ll find
your Santa Claus when he comes to your house for giving you gifts once. Have a
nice time when Christmas’s Day comes.
V.ing
- The fire burning the charcoal in the chimney.
- The mistletoe standing on the right corner of
the room.
- It making a
perfect Christmas.
V.ed
- The
mistletoe decorated by lots of little
gifts.
- The shelves
located next to the chimney.
- The atmosphere
warmed by flame of fire.

ตอบลบScore is 10
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ตอบลบYour passage is pretty good. I like the way you wrote it. And you can use V.ed and V.ing to describe the things perfectly.
ตอบลบScore 9
Your writing is quite good. Using V.ed and V.ing to describe the things are important for this course.
ตอบลบMy points are 9
I can understand what you want me to know about your writing, but some sentences are wrong. For instance, " it make the atmosphere warmed by flame of fire." So, the word "make" should be "makes" because the word "it" is the singular noun. Thus, the verb after "it" shoud add "-s". So, I will give you 8.5 points.
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